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Re: It'll never work; 19th Century Flight 101

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Re: It'll never work; 19th Century Flight 101

Terrible.

lwoodnj wrote:Terrible.

Umm... Thanks.

Re: It'll never work; 19th Century Flight 101

lmao. i do agree it is terrible. who would even want to wear that as a shirt? i can't even understand it. all i see is a chalkboard in a classroom with a plane on it and some weird drawings. and its a blocky picture. and it has a crappy overall feel. if this is your first entry than sure, second, maybe but if this is like your 5th i suggest trying to make something you would wear

Grave95 wrote:lmao. i do agree it is terrible. who would even want to wear that as a shirt? i can't even understand it. all i see is a chalkboard in a classroom with a plane on it and some weird drawings. and its a blocky picture. and it has a crappy overall feel. if this is your first entry than sure, second, maybe but if this is like your 5th i suggest trying to make something you would wear

I would wear it. While yes, it is my first, I kind of like it. It's simple, but references that stupid video that gets played so often that has all of the failed flying inventions. Seems pretty straight forward to me. I get tired of so many of the designs here being people drawing cute animals that have nothing to do with the theme. I guess there is more of a teenage japanese girl aesthetic in play here than I realised.

AustinMiniMan wrote:IIt's simple, but references that stupid video that gets played so often that has all of the failed flying inventions.

The derby rules stated that no video game references could be used. Just sayin' ...

EclecticMuse wrote:The derby rules stated that no video game references could be used. Just sayin' ...

Scratch that, my reading comprehension fails.

EclecticMuse wrote:Scratch that, my reading comprehension fails.

Yeah... I was really confused for a second. It's all good though... adhering to made up rules is the American way! :-/

Thanks for looking. -Ted

AustinMiniMan wrote:Yeah... I was really confused for a second. It's all good though... adhering to made up rules is the American way! :-/

Thanks for looking. -Ted

No problem! I'm sorry if I came off as being uptight. If you'd like some concrit, here goes:

Something about the perspective is bugging me. It might be that the lines in the actual illustration are on a slant while the outline is straight, but I dunno.

Also I think it might work better if the edges sort of faded out, instead of being a hard outline. Or alternatively, if you wanted to keep the edges hard, you could try make the illustration area more of a rectangle (panoramic aspect ratio blah blah, I'm scaffolding at getting technical terms across)

Lastly, for the type of illustration I'd probably use solid colors and/or cell shading. But that's just me.

I hope this helps ... I find it more than a little rude and not helpful at all when people just say a design is horrid, and offer no constructive criticism. All it does is tear the artist down and not inspire them to try and better their craft.

Re: It'll never work; 19th Century Flight 101

I think the problem comes in the layout. It looks like a picture pated on a shirt. The shirt needs to be apart of the picture!
I do however understand and appreciate the subject matter. The irony is amazing. In fact it strikes me as gary larson-ish.

metroidmime wrote:I think the problem comes in the layout. It looks like a picture pated on a shirt. The shirt needs to be apart of the picture!
I do however understand and appreciate the subject matter. The irony is amazing. In fact it strikes me as gary larson-ish.

i meant pasted not pated :P

EclecticMuse wrote:No problem! I'm sorry if I came off as being uptight. If you'd like some concrit, here goes:

Something about the perspective is bugging me. It might be that the lines in the actual illustration are on a slant while the outline is straight, but I dunno.

Also I think it might work better if the edges sort of faded out, instead of being a hard outline. Or alternatively, if you wanted to keep the edges hard, you could try make the illustration area more of a rectangle (panoramic aspect ratio blah blah, I'm scaffolding at getting technical terms across)

Lastly, for the type of illustration I'd probably use solid colors and/or cell shading. But that's just me.

I hope this helps ... I find it more than a little rude and not helpful at all when people just say a design is horrid, and offer no constructive criticism. All it does is tear the artist down and not inspire them to try and better their craft.

Thanks... I really appreciate the thoughts. My artistic design skills do leave something to be desired, and I'm limited to GIMP, so it did suffer a bit(My skills being the bigger limiting factor.) I did struggle a bit on what to do with the edges, because a border would be too busy, yet having no background wouldn't give a lot of contrast for such a simple subject. I think the main problem was I really wanted it to be on a black shirt. I'll try and make my next design more integrated. Thanks again. -Ted

metroidmime wrote:I think the problem comes in the layout. It looks like a picture pated on a shirt. The shirt needs to be apart of the picture!
I do however understand and appreciate the subject matter. The irony is amazing. In fact it strikes me as gary larson-ish.

I'll keep that in mind. And being anywhere near compared to gary larson, regardless of how vague or undeserved, is a huge compliment. Thanks. -Ted

AustinMiniMan wrote:Thanks... I really appreciate the thoughts. My artistic design skills do leave something to be desired, and I'm limited to GIMP, so it did suffer a bit(My skills being the bigger limiting factor.) I did struggle a bit on what to do with the edges, because a border would be too busy, yet having no background wouldn't give a lot of contrast for such a simple subject. I think the main problem was I really wanted it to be on a black shirt. I'll try and make my next design more integrated. Thanks again. -Ted

Not a problem! I think you were onto something good there, but the execution needed some work. Good luck with your next design!