Derby #33: Lyrics Illustrated
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Inspired by "Dancing in the Dark"

Inspired by "Dancing in the Dark"
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rglee129


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Re: [url=http://shirt.woot.com/Derby/Entry.aspx?id=11234]Inspired by

I'm resub-ing based on some critiques of the framing (Thanks for the feedback!)

"I check my look in the mirror, I wanna change my CLOTHES, my HAIR, my FACE!" "You can't start a fire without a spark... Even if we're just dancing in the dark."

Favorite song of all time.

AdderXYU


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rglee129 wrote:I'm resub-ing based on some critiques of the framing (Thanks for the feedback!)

"I check my look in the mirror, I wanna change my CLOTHES, my HAIR, my FACE!" "You can't start a fire without a spark... Even if we're just dancing in the dark."

Favorite song of all time.


I can see where you're coming from on this now that you quote the lines.

The problem, as I see it, is this: You've made it very clear you're a very good artist. Your design is smooth and detailed, the colours, even the pink which I really don't like, work well together and show an eye for shading (and I like how well you've incorporated the shirt itself). The problem, then, is the design itself. I don't think many people would find it wearable, with the main guy being a burly mulletbiker, and the other characters having a somewhat different, goofier style to them... it just doesn't scream "good idea" to me.

That said, I want to see more of you. I don't know how long you've been dabbling in design, but it's clear you've got art skills, and I hope to see your work evolve over time. This particular shirt, while I see a lot of potential, doesn't highlight what you're capable of, and I hope you'll stick around long enough to wow us.

rglee129


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AdderXYU wrote:I can see where you're coming from on this now that you quote the lines.

The problem, as I see it, is this: You've made it very clear you're a very good artist. Your design is smooth and detailed, the colours, even the pink which I really don't like, work well together and show an eye for shading (and I like how well you've incorporated the shirt itself). The problem, then, is the design itself. I don't think many people would find it wearable, with the main guy being a burly mulletbiker, and the other characters having a somewhat different, goofier style to them... it just doesn't scream "good idea" to me.

That said, I want to see more of you. I don't know how long you've been dabbling in design, but it's clear you've got art skills, and I hope to see your work evolve over time. This particular shirt, while I see a lot of potential, doesn't highlight what you're capable of, and I hope you'll stick around long enough to wow us.


Thanks- obviously something's up since the votes aren't coming in. I thought this design would be unique and emotional, but maybe it's not abstract enough or whimsical. I'll try to think what more people might want on a shirt other than what I think is cool (the goal is to get votes, after all. Once we start voting it kind of turns from "art" into "design") Thx


AdderXYU


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rglee129 wrote:Thanks- obviously something's up since the votes aren't coming in. I thought this design would be unique and emotional, but maybe it's not abstract enough or whimsical. I'll try to think what more people might want on a shirt other than what I think is cool (the goal is to get votes, after all. Once we start voting it kind of turns from "art" into "design") Thx


The best way to learn is by doing and looking. Find designs and designers who speak to you, and see what techniques they use. Check other shirt sites and do the same. I'm not saying to steal ideas, but see what makes their ideas "work" for you, and try to develop that into your own work while keeping your own art. And moreover, keep putting things on paper or screen, depending on what you use. You're starting off here with a lot of raw skill. The more you use it, the more you'll hone it, and the more likely you'll be to hit on an idea that not only appeals to you, but appeals to the voters as well.

MHBoston


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AdderXYU wrote:The problem, then, is the design itself. I don't think many people would find it wearable, with the main guy being a burly mulletbiker, and the other characters having a somewhat different, goofier style to them... it just doesn't scream "good idea" to me.

That said, I want to see more of you. I don't know how long you've been dabbling in design, but it's clear you've got art skills, and I hope to see your work evolve over time. This particular shirt, while I see a lot of potential, doesn't highlight what you're capable of, and I hope you'll stick around long enough to wow us.

You've expressed my feelings too, Adder. Sometimes I want a "I appreciate the execution and artistry of this designer, but I don't want to buy this shirt" button.

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ianthemighty


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Very nicely done. You've got my vote, but I'm also more okay than most with wearing a well-done shirt that makes me look foolish. Adder might be right in that some kids would be afraid to wear it.

Think about the average wooter: I mean, what kind of person hovers over his computer every night at midnight just to see what new schlock he can buy? What motivates this person? Obviously, he's desperate for a spark of humanity in the dark caverns of the Internet. Obviously, he wants a shirt that makes him feel like a member of a club. I could see people shying away from your shirt because it'd be too ambiguous to the people who'd see them wear it. "Is that guy cool...? I can't tell."

And now I've joined the advisory board you didn't ask for.

rglee129


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ianthemighty wrote:Very nicely done. You've got my vote, but I'm also more okay than most with wearing a well-done shirt that makes me look foolish. Adder might be right in that some kids would be afraid to wear it.

Think about the average wooter: I mean, what kind of person hovers over his computer every night at midnight just to see what new schlock he can buy? What motivates this person? Obviously, he's desperate for a spark of humanity in the dark caverns of the Internet. Obviously, he wants a shirt that makes him feel like a member of a club. I could see people shying away from your shirt because it'd be too ambiguous to the people who'd see them wear it. "Is that guy cool...? I can't tell."

And now I've joined the advisory board you didn't ask for.


My first preference is a lot of votes. But a close number two would be some well thought out posts that serve as a kind of broad commentary on wootshirt art vs. design and wearability vs. visual stimulation (not that any of those are mutually exclusive, of course!) Regardless, thanks for some attention- I'm already looking forward to the next derby. (Plus I'm in a good mood because UNC just beat Dook in college hoops!) Thanks, folks.




kjmendoza


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"Think about the average wooter: I mean, what kind of person hovers over his computer every night at midnight just to see what new schlock he can buy? What motivates this person? Obviously, he's desperate for a spark of humanity in the dark caverns of the Internet. Obviously, he wants a shirt that makes him feel like a member of a club. I could see people shying away from your shirt because it'd be too ambiguous to the people who'd see them wear it. "Is that guy cool...? I can't tell."

I love your analysis of the average wooter!

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ohhhshtbtch


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I dig the idea, but the Hawaiian-shirt-man kills it for me. I think if it was just the mullety biker looking over his shoulder with the mirror and the striped panel background, I'd be more likely to buy it. Most people I know would probably be OK with silly shirts as long as they're done well. This is close, just not quite there.

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