Derby #125: Birds
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Tori ni Nari

Tori ni Nari
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xazothia


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The title of this means "Become a bird", and it's taken from a song by my favorite singer/songwriter, "Rasen (Spiral)" by Chihiro Onitsuka.

watashi wa tori ni nari
zattou wo tondeyuku
mayoi wa hane ni nari
subete wo furikitteyuku

"I become a bird
and fly over the crowd
My doubt becomes wings
and I shake off the weight of everything"

Larger image can be seen here.

omnitarian


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Elegant! 'Tis very nice.

taninniver


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Gorgeous linework - this is really beautiful.
I've never been a huge can of halftoning, but that's purely a personal stylistic preference - I'd likely buy it regardless ;)
Good luck - I love this!

TheyKilledKenny


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Fancy... GMV

Excuse Me Maam, Your Woot is Showing...

xazothia


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taninniver wrote:Gorgeous linework - this is really beautiful.
I've never been a huge can of halftoning, but that's purely a personal stylistic preference - I'd likely buy it regardless ;)
Good luck - I love this!


Thank you!

Halftones vs. flats is part of my uphill climb in figuring out shirt design. Some day, I will find the perfect balance.

loveengrey


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Yayyy Chihiro Onitsuka! She has such a pretty voice

And I really like what you've done here. Personally, I don't really like half tones, but they actually make this piece work. I also like how you're not actually drawing a bird; rather drawing a person trying to become one. Very unique to me

xazothia


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loveengrey wrote:Yayyy Chihiro Onitsuka! She has such a pretty voice

And I really like what you've done here. Personally, I don't really like half tones, but they actually make this piece work. I also like how you're not actually drawing a bird; rather drawing a person trying to become one. Very unique to me


Yaaaay someone else on here who knows Chihiro :D

Thank you :3

jasneko


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As said before - looks really lovely! Great designs this week.


JaundiceDave


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I love the linework, but I don't think the halftones on the wings add to the piece.

xazothia


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Thanks for the feedback, guys.

this is what it's looking like without halftones:


yay or nay? I tried making overlapping feather shapes so it's not just a flat swoosh of white, but I didn't care for it that way.

StargateGamingGeek


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xazothia wrote:Thanks for the feedback, guys.

this is what it's looking like without halftones:


yay or nay? I tried making overlapping feather shapes so it's not just a flat swoosh of white, but I didn't care for it that way.


I prefer it with the halftones. If I had to try and say why I guess it looks more natural, though that doesn't seem like quite the expression I'd like I can't think of anything better to say it.

mrwednesday


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xazothia wrote:Thanks for the feedback, guys.

this is what it's looking like without halftones:

yay or nay? I tried making overlapping feather shapes so it's not just a flat swoosh of white, but I didn't care for it that way.


It's tough to say. I like the gradation and the stark line is a little jarring but I think it matches better with the rest of the comp (which is really great by the way). I would worry a bit about how the halftones would actually print since it's not a look that really turns out well on the shirt and it may clash a lot more than you think it will once it's in print.

xazothia


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mrwednesday wrote:It's tough to say. I like the gradation and the stark line is a little jarring but I think it matches better with the rest of the comp (which is really great by the way). I would worry a bit about how the halftones would actually print since it's not a look that really turns out well on the shirt and it may clash a lot more than you think it will once it's in print.


I went ahead and submitted the halftone-less version here. We'll see which one is doing better after a while, but I get the feeling this one is going to stay ahead just because of the submission time...

gesangbaer


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Off topic comment ...

This shirt supplied me with some nostalgia. Reminded me of a character from a nintendo power comic MANY years ago, named Roam. He was a knight trapped in the world of darkness and stuck in the form of a hawk ... or an eagle.

Anyway, great shirt! Thanks for the memory!

xazothia


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gesangbaer wrote:Apparently I've got no clue on how to submit links.

http://www.flyingomelette.com/oddities/sab/roam.jpg


You don't need to use quotation marks " when you're using the bbcode url tag

that Roam guy looks a lot like a character from Cyborg 009...

xazothia


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gesangbaer wrote:Off topic comment ...

This shirt supplied me with some nostalgia. Reminded me of a character from a nintendo power comic MANY years ago, named Roam. He was a knight trapped in the world of darkness and stuck in the form of a hawk ... or an eagle.

Anyway, great shirt! Thanks for the memory!


And I just realized you were replying to my design! Haha, awesome. :P I'm glad you got to do down memory lane I'll have to look that up, it sounds pretty interesting actually.

marmls2m


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xazothia wrote:Thanks for the feedback, guys.

this is what it's looking like without halftones:

yay or nay? I tried making overlapping feather shapes so it's not just a flat swoosh of white, but I didn't care for it that way.


i definitely think that it needs blending, but i dont like the halftones for the same reason as mr wednesday. i think it would look best if it was a natural blend pattern like that of a birds feathers. i guess what i am trying to say is that i think it would look better with tapered lines of color creating the blend effect. i doubt i am making much sense


ozgrl12


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marmls2m wrote:i definitely think that it needs blending, but i dont like the halftones for the same reason as mr wednesday. i think it would look best if it was a natural blend pattern like that of a birds feathers. i guess what i am trying to say is that i think it would look better with tapered lines of color creating the blend effect. i doubt i am making much sense


maybe i dont have as fine an eye as you guys do, but the halftones look ok to me. i also really love the movement in this.

great job!

xazothia


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ozgrl12 wrote:maybe i dont have as fine an eye as you guys do, but the halftones look ok to me. i also really love the movement in this.

great job!


Thank you

And thanks to marmls2m as well, all of the feedback I've had either way on these has been valid and helpful.

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