Derby #186: Oddball
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Failure to Launch

Failure to Launch
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ressamac


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I guess not everyone can rise from the ashes.

marzipanapple


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You have a nice clean style. I've been jaded on phoenix designs, but I can see the potential here in your style.

Just a few tips, if you're willing. The birds look as though they've been copy/pasted. Usually, this is going to make a design look stale unless there's an obvious reason the designer is using it (to make a point/to make a repeating design). Otherwise, if you *do* want to copy/paste, one of the tricks I do is to go back over it and change a few things. It keeps the design engaging.
Aaand, that's really all I have. The rest is mostly my own opinion. The message is a little muddled to me(out of context, it's hard to figure out what the little guy is or isn't doing in the middle), and it might be nice to have one more color somewhere.

ressamac


quality posts: 4 Private Messages ressamac
marzipanapple wrote:You have a nice clean style. I've been jaded on phoenix designs, but I can see the potential here in your style.

Just a few tips, if you're willing. The birds look as though they've been copy/pasted. Usually, this is going to make a design look stale unless there's an obvious reason the designer is using it (to make a point/to make a repeating design). Otherwise, if you *do* want to copy/paste, one of the tricks I do is to go back over it and change a few things. It keeps the design engaging.
Aaand, that's really all I have. The rest is mostly my own opinion. The message is a little muddled to me(out of context, it's hard to figure out what the little guy is or isn't doing in the middle), and it might be nice to have one more color somewhere.


Thank you, MarzipanApple, I really appreciate the feedback and I agree with what you are saying. I can take the vector file into Photoshop and play with it a bit.

npromero


quality posts: 0 Private Messages npromero
marzipanapple wrote:You have a nice clean style. I've been jaded on phoenix designs, but I can see the potential here in your style.

Just a few tips, if you're willing. The birds look as though they've been copy/pasted. Usually, this is going to make a design look stale unless there's an obvious reason the designer is using it (to make a point/to make a repeating design). Otherwise, if you *do* want to copy/paste, one of the tricks I do is to go back over it and change a few things. It keeps the design engaging.
Aaand, that's really all I have. The rest is mostly my own opinion. The message is a little muddled to me(out of context, it's hard to figure out what the little guy is or isn't doing in the middle), and it might be nice to have one more color somewhere.


Howdy howdy howdy,

A few comments of my own.
It's too low of a res to tell if it's really C&P, such the nature of jpegs. Yes, I get that the two adults look like mirror images. But they are mother and father of a incredibly rare species of bird. In fact so rare they are consider by most to be mystical. As for the little guy in the middle, he is being re-born. From the ashes come a child when in consideration of Phoenix.
Actually to quote a professional in the field, " It's a shame you had to see him on a Burning Day. He's really very handsome most of the time, wonderful red and gold plumage. Fascinating creatures, phoenixes. They can carry immensely heavy loads, their tears have healing powers, and they make highly faithful pets." (Wilfred Albus Dumbledore: The Order of the Phoenix, pg 151)
The plumage in mention helps describe "what the little guy is or isn't doing in the middle".

I believe this is whats considered getting schooled, geek style.



cherylfrancis


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npromero wrote:Howdy howdy howdy,

A few comments of my own.
It's too low of a res to tell if it's really C&P, such the nature of jpegs. Yes, I get that the two adults look like mirror images. But they are mother and father of a incredibly rare species of bird. In fact so rare they are consider by most to be mystical. As for the little guy in the middle, he is being re-born. From the ashes come a child when in consideration of Phoenix.
Actually to quote a professional in the field, " It's a shame you had to see him on a Burning Day. He's really very handsome most of the time, wonderful red and gold plumage. Fascinating creatures, phoenixes. They can carry immensely heavy loads, their tears have healing powers, and they make highly faithful pets." (Wilfred Albus Dumbledore: The Order of the Phoenix, pg 151)
The plumage in mention helps describe "what the little guy is or isn't doing in the middle".

I believe this is whats considered getting schooled, geek style.


I like it.

npromero


quality posts: 0 Private Messages npromero
npromero wrote:Howdy howdy howdy,

A few comments of my own.
It's too low of a res to tell if it's really C&P, such the nature of jpegs. Yes, I get that the two adults look like mirror images. But they are mother and father of a incredibly rare species of bird. In fact so rare they are consider by most to be mystical. As for the little guy in the middle, he is being re-born. From the ashes come a child when in consideration of Phoenix.
Actually to quote a professional in the field, " It's a shame you had to see him on a Burning Day. He's really very handsome most of the time, wonderful red and gold plumage. Fascinating creatures, phoenixes. They can carry immensely heavy loads, their tears have healing powers, and they make highly faithful pets." (Wilfred Albus Dumbledore: The Order of the Phoenix, pg 151)
The plumage in mention helps describe "what the little guy is or isn't doing in the middle".

I believe this is whats considered getting schooled, geek style.


Quick edit. This is from The Chamber of Secrets.

On another side note, it's hard to quote when you're drunk. :D



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