Derby #190: Magic
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Yawn

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analogradio


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Re: Yawn

There's magic everywhere you look; when you change the way you look at things, the things you look at change. The poor sap is missing the magic right in front of his eyes.

This is my first entry here; any critique would be wonderful .

aliciabeck


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analogradio wrote:There's magic everywhere you look; when you change the way you look at things, the things you look at change. The poor sap is missing the magic right in front of his eyes.

This is my first entry here; any critique would be wonderful .

novastarj


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Re: Yawn


It's a good first effort. I like the style you were going for, very minimalist.

I think the problem with this shirt is it's not very wearable. Step back and look at it from a distance. It kind of looks like a navy shirt with two tan blobs.

The wizard in the TV really fades into the background (and the chair does as well). Also the "light" reflecting in the person's face is very distracting... I think it needs to be lessened dramatically. Finally, the TV stand is frankly a big tan blob, which wouldn't be a big issue except it's the biggest and brightest item on the shirt, and draws all the attention.

I actually really dig the minimalist approach for shirts, and not many people here use it. And it is a good effort. But in this case the shirt doesn't quite come together like I'm sure you envisioned it.

For this shirt, I think it'd look better on a cranberry/red/orange background, and put all of the "magical" contents of the TV in white so it stands out, for example...

Anyway, keep up the good work, look forward to seeing your efforts in the next derby!

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