Derby #196: Amusement Parks
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You must be this tall to siege!

You must be this tall to siege!
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lkweigel


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Re: You must be this tall to siege!


One more gargleblaster! Love it!

Sergio37


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yakimikku


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hahhahahha NICE!!! :D

nuklearpie


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Love the concept!
Just a couple of things I would like to see in this.

1. Without knowing the context of the shirt "amusement parks," it's a bit difficult to to extrapolate that the short knight (SK) is being rejected for the siege. Or at least, it's not immediately apparent that is the intention. I would add maybe a long line of tall knights behind the catapult, or have it pass by the SK. Or even have a ride entrance gate with festive amusement designs!

2. I'm not sure if it's my computer, or just the template, but the artwork isn't very 'clean'. I think your lining could be better done and would really make this image more instantly memorable, this also applies to the detail in the wall.

I know this is a lot of work, but more effort and hard work will make entries like this a formidable entry.

Excellent start though! I enjoy entries like this instead of woodland creatures in funny poses...

mjc613


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nuklearpie wrote:...1. Without knowing the context of the shirt "amusement parks," it's a bit difficult to to extrapolate that the short knight (SK) is being rejected for the siege. Or at least, it's not immediately apparent that is the intention.

Excellent start though! I enjoy entries like this instead of woodland creatures in funny poses...


All I would add to this comment is that it also holds if you don't know the title.
Excellent linework, so keep entering.

burnapaperzach


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This is super cool!

alephnull2k1


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nuklearpie wrote:Love the concept!
Just a couple of things I would like to see in this.

1. Without knowing the context of the shirt "amusement parks," it's a bit difficult to to extrapolate that the short knight (SK) is being rejected for the siege. Or at least, it's not immediately apparent that is the intention. I would add maybe a long line of tall knights behind the catapult, or have it pass by the SK. Or even have a ride entrance gate with festive amusement designs!


I think the rejection reads quite well (clearly the short knight is dejected), but I think there's a disconnect between the "measuring" and the "ride"...the catapulting knight is fairly far in the background. I could see this reading better if there were a "cattle chute" leading up to the catapult with other (taller) knights in it, and maybe a queue of knights behind the short knight, just to reinforce that the short knight is being rejected from "the ride" that everyone else is getting to go on.

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