Derby #203: Red
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Red Bloom

Red Bloom
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Chaosegg


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I like the flower and the planet... the white blips and squiggly lines not so much.

fairnymph


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Re: Red Bloom


I voted on this, but I think that that the pale peach specks surrounding the moon look messy and sloppy, taking away from the elegance and overall beauty of the design. I highly recommend that you resubmit another version without the specks.

I would also like to see more blue-toned shades of red (like crimson, scarlet, cranberry, magenta - more purple-ish tones), as opposed to the orange and peachy tones you used here. That's totally a personal preference, and I DO love and fully approve of how the tone of the all the reds is the shame, and you used shades that are similar enough to create a seamless effect without going TOO similar, which would detract from the contrast and clarity of the design. So just shifting the tone of the colours up the spectrum towards blue would be perfect IMO.

Also, I know that I have a bagillion black shirts and it is a very commonly used and sold shirt colour, possibly THE most common, As a result, I am loathe to buy any more black shirts since I already have at least 4x as many black shirts as any other colour, and more black shirts than all other colour shirts combined by a huge margin. And others have said the same. So consider putting this shirt on Navy (which would work superbly with a shift towards the bluer-tone of red shades), or even Slate and Graphite - the latter would work really well with the design's current peachy tones, since orange looks great against grey IMO -but it would look wonderful with bluer reds, too.

Some other benefits of changing the background shirt colour: Graphite is a very popular colour, second only to black, and appeals and thus sells well. Slate is a very NEW colour, and no slate shirt has yet been printed. And, like Navy, I don't believe there are any other - or if so, very few - shirts that are on Navy or Slate, which makes your design stand out as unique & fresh relative to the massive overload of red/cranberry, and even the fair number of black shirts.

I hope you read this and find it useful and would be THRILLED if you made any or all of the changes - I don't see how submitting multiple versions ever hurts, and if anything it multiples your exposure which is always great. Regardless, I like this shirt enough as it is that I voted and would buy and wear it. Your style is lovely, and I adore flowers and the moon.

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fairnymph


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Re: Red Bloom


Chaosegg wrote:I like the flower and the planet... the white blips and squiggly lines not so much.


Oh, and I agree with this LIFESAVER (my browser will not let me post on your design, for no apparent reason other than Safari viciously hates me.) The red squiggly lines are lazy and do not add much and distract from the overall design & especially the main focus which is clearly much-worked on. Either take it out completely and see how it looks, and if it still works then fine. Or if you find that removing the red squiggles leaves you with an empty-looking foreground that removes dimensionality, then take the time and effort to construct a better one that matches the quality of the main design, maybe something with half-tones as many artists do for back- & foregrounds?

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