Derby #203: Red
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Flames of the Phoenix

Flames of the Phoenix
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melfox86


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Re: Flames of the Phoenix


I don't know why this one isn't higher! I love it. Come on wooters, look down here and vote!!

shellstars


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melfox86 wrote:I don't know why this one isn't higher! I love it. Come on wooters, look down here and vote!!


aw thanks so much :D

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fairnymph


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Re: Flames of the Phoenix


You're obviously talented and I dig your style, but there's an unfortunate effect of your style here in that the phoenix ends up looking raggedy, droopy from the swirly/integrative colouration. But even more importantly, it's just a phoenix on a shirt. No background at all - not even a line and some simple half-tones to add some dimension and sense of space - so not only does the phoenix itself suffer and appear rather flat, but the lack of background makes the whole shirt REALLY flat.

Some context would make this shirt much more interesting, meaningful, and appealing to the eye, while creating the essential dimensionality and perspective required for any art - ESPECIALLY on a wearable item like a shirt - to 'pop' with realistic appeal.

I didn't vote, but phoenixes are popular and I'm a real fan myself, they work well for this derby's theme, and you put in the work, you could create something truly great with potential for success. Rework and give it a go! And I hope you take my commentary as the well-meaning constructive criticism intended and nothing more sinister. I'm rooting for you.

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shellstars


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fairnymph wrote:You're obviously talented and I dig your style, but there's an unfortunate effect of your style here in that the phoenix ends up looking raggedy, droopy from the swirly/integrative colouration. But even more importantly, it's just a phoenix on a shirt. No background at all - not even a line and some simple half-tones to add some dimension and sense of space - so not only does the phoenix itself suffer and appear rather flat, but the lack of background makes the whole shirt REALLY flat.

Some context would make this shirt much more interesting, meaningful, and appealing to the eye, while creating the essential dimensionality and perspective required for any art - ESPECIALLY on a wearable item like a shirt - to 'pop' with realistic appeal.

I didn't vote, but phoenixes are popular and I'm a real fan myself, they work
well for this derby's theme, and you put in the work, you could create
something truly great with potential for success. Rework and give it a go! And
I hope you take my commentary as the well-meaning constructive criticism
intended and nothing more sinister. I'm rooting for you.


Thanks for taking the time to give such an in-depth critique This is only my
second derby entry, I generally work using traditional methods & media so
am fairly new to working digitally. I tried several halftone methods on the background but couldn't get the hang of how to use halftone
effectively and gave up - if you have any tutorial recommendations I would love to check them out.

Anyway, thanks again!

~ shells

Website: www.mysteryandshadows.com
DA: qmab.deviantart.com
Red Bubble: redbubble.com/people/teeshell

shellstars


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Re: Flames of the Phoenix


Both this design and V2 will be available at RedBubble after the Derby is finished The link to is in my sig below.

~ shells

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DA: qmab.deviantart.com
Red Bubble: redbubble.com/people/teeshell

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