Derby #209: Fairy Tales
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The Sea-Hare and the jackalope

The Sea-Hare and the jackalope
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seedsofsedition


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I kept trying to work on my other submission's re-sub and getting frustrated so I started wondering about sea-hares (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Sea-Hare). What do they look like? What if one immigrated to america? What if it fell in love with a jackalope? etc

The design, specifically the color choices, seems off. Any helpful critiques would be appreciated.

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seedsofsedition


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paigeg


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seedsofsedition wrote:I kept trying to work on my other submission's re-sub and getting frustrated so I started wondering about sea-hares (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Sea-Hare). What do they look like? What if one immigrated to america? What if it fell in love with a jackalope? etc

The design, specifically the color choices, seems off. Any helpful critiques would be appreciated.


Sadly, I can't access your larger file from here (damned site filters!). But as to the color choices - it all looks OK except for the Sea Hare itself. I'm not familiar with the critters (apparently they're mollusks), but if you want to represent it as an actual hare, maybe a blue-grey would convey both hare and sea, and pop better against the shirt. Then if you still have colors left, use a bit of blue or blue-green to set off the waves... Just a suggestion.

seedsofsedition


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paigeg wrote:Sadly, I can't access your larger file from here (damned site filters!). But as to the color choices - it all looks OK except for the Sea Hare itself. I'm not familiar with the critters (apparently they're mollusks), but if you want to represent it as an actual hare, maybe a blue-grey would convey both hare and sea, and pop better against the shirt. Then if you still have colors left, use a bit of blue or blue-green to set off the waves... Just a suggestion.


That is what I was thinking but I used 6 colors and couldn't decide what to get rid of. I suppose I could halftone the yellow and blue to make green and then I could use one more color (grey) but I'm afraid the halftones would 1)look goofy 2) the resulting green would be kinda brownish since the yellow is in the redish-yellow spectrum.
So what color would you get rid of?

I think the sea-hare is too dark either way.

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ochopika


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seedsofsedition wrote:That is what I was thinking but I used 6 colors and couldn't decide what to get rid of. I suppose I could halftone be yellow and blue to make green and then I'd get a grey but I'm afraid the halftones would 1)look goofy 2) the green would be kinda brownish since the yellow is in the redish-yellow spectrum.
So what color would you get rid of?

I think the sea-hare is too dark either way.


You've got a nice, painterly style here. You are right that the colors need to pop more. What I would do is leave the halftones in the background as they look good there. Make the animals solid, with maybe parts of the highlights and shadows halftones.

The yellow in the background does look good, but you could play around with the color. There would be more contrast if it were closer to the shirt color, and the animals were a more contrasting color. The brown shirt is very dark and warm, so the highlights and shadows should be very cool (white or dark blue/green).

The highlights and shadows on the animals could also be amplified a bit. I try to make my lights and darks more bold than I think they should be, then when I'm done it usually looks better than I thought it would.

Here is one of my brown-shirt designs where the colors kinda worked (not that I'm a color master or anything, it's just the only example I can think of now): tree thing
Hope that is helpful and not too much text.

seedsofsedition


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ochopika wrote:You've got a nice, painterly style here. You are right that the colors need to pop more. What I would do is leave the halftones in the background as they look good there. Make the animals solid, with maybe parts of the highlights and shadows halftones.

The yellow in the background does look good, but you could play around with the color. There would be more contrast if it were closer to the shirt color, and the animals were a more contrasting color. The brown shirt is very dark and warm, so the highlights and shadows should be very cool (white or dark blue/green).

The highlights and shadows on the animals could also be amplified a bit. I try to make my lights and darks more bold than I think they should be, then when I'm done it usually looks better than I thought it would.

Here is one of my brown-shirt designs where the colors kinda worked (not that I'm a color master or anything, it's just the only example I can think of now): tree thing
Hope that is helpful and not too much text.


You're right, I have a tendency to want to halftone EVERYTHING and be too delicate with my details.
Might be time to go back over my color theory texts.

Thanks for giving me some fresh eyes on this. I really appreciate the constructive crit.

also I kinda love your shirts.

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ochopika


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seedsofsedition wrote:

Thanks for giving me some fresh eyes on this. I really appreciate the constructive crit.

also I kinda love your shirts.


*blush*

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