Derby #272: College Shirts

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runnerfrog13


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Re: This is not the diploma you are looking for

I like the lightsaber alot, but have some suggestions for the text:

1. "Jedi's" should actually be "Jedis" without the apostrophe. With an apostrophe here it means that whatever comes next in the sentence is something the Jedi owns, without an apostrophe means more than one Jedi, or a team of Jedis.


2. Put University and Coruscant on two lines, one above the other (or one at the top and one on the very bottom of the picture, so they curve into a circle) because it's pretty long right now and the ends will get lost in someone's armpits.


You could get away with just doing #1 and keeping #2 as is, but either way, definitely resubmit a second version!!

paaiyan


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runnerfrog13 wrote:I like the lightsaber alot, but have some suggestions for the text:

1. "Jedi's" should actually be "Jedis" without the apostrophe. With an apostrophe here it means that whatever comes next in the sentence is something the Jedi owns, without an apostrophe means more than one Jedi, or a team of Jedis.


2. Put University and Coruscant on two lines, one above the other (or one at the top and one on the very bottom of the picture, so they curve into a circle) because it's pretty long right now and the ends will get lost in someone's armpits.


You could get away with just doing #1 and keeping #2 as is, but either way, definitely resubmit a second version!!


Jedi is both singular and plural. Jedi's or Jedis, both wrong, they are.

runnerfrog13


quality posts: 10 Private Messages runnerfrog13
paaiyan wrote:Jedi is both singular and plural. Jedi's or Jedis, both wrong, they are.

Of course it would have to be one of those awkward words like mice, isn't it...

In that case, change to "Jedi" instead!

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