stevegoll68 wrote:Helpful comments on these two would be appreciated. Any improvements that can be made in the future? I'd hoped these would get a lot more votes. But I guess every artist hopes that LOL
As far as subject matter goes, that movie (and presumably the book) is a good choice and well-loved here. I've personally won 2 derbies using it as inspiration.
I'd say pick a font and roll with it. As a designer you should be confident in your choices. The two, very similar versions, at best going to split votes, at worst, come off confusing to the voters.
- The design/layout/colors aren't bad, but I think there's not enough to connect the viewer. The image of the swap is well-done, but where's the narrative? Maybe a prominent R.O.U.S. somewhere? Or a body in the sand? Something like that might be better visually. Even "lightning sand diving contests" or something makes it humorous and interesting.
- Is it a "Visit" poster, marketing travel to the swamp? Or a comic book cover? Something else? Not clear to me.
- The tagline at the bottom is hard to read
- Not sure if you have clever halftoning going on, but I'm seeing as many as 8 or 9 colors. There's still a 6 color limit-rule in effect.
- Make the image larger in the detail view, and shirt comp smaller. Might have helped. It was tougher to do that this derby with the journal comp added in, but you still had more room to work with.
Hope that's useful!