Derby #125: Birds
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Tori ni Nari v.2

Tori ni Nari v.2
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xazothia


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Re: Tori ni Nari v.2

The title of this means "Become a bird", and it's taken from a song by my favorite singer/songwriter, "Rasen (Spiral)" by Chihiro Onitsuka.

watashi wa tori ni nari
zattou wo tondeyuku
mayoi wa hane ni nari
subete wo furikitteyuku

"I become a bird
and fly over the crowd
My doubt becomes wings
and I shake off the weight of everything"

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Now with fewer halftones.

Is this too brown? I keep viewing my LCD monitor from different angles and I can't freakin' tell anymore.

bethlehemstarr


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I liked how the halftones in the other one look- but I think that this one will probably look better printed.
Either way, I love the expression on her face (sort of distant and 'dedicated', which I think is awfully difficult to get across without most of the face!). I think it's a great, unique take on the theme.

bethlehemstarr


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oh- and I think you should also post that song explaining the meaning of the shirt on this one as well- lots of people don't seem to check resubmits and compare them to the original.

xazothia


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bethlehemstarr wrote:oh- and I think you should also post that song explaining the meaning of the shirt on this one as well- lots of people don't seem to check resubmits and compare them to the original.


Thanks for your feedback

I'll edit the story etc into the first post.

walmazan


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I love it! and the placement too!

+1

xazothia


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walmazan wrote:I love it! and the placement too!

+1


thanks, walmazan!

AdderXYU


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fwiw, I think this is looking way better sans halftoning.

xazothia


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AdderXYU wrote:fwiw, I think this is looking way better sans halftoning.


Figures. ;P

Can't get it right without a few misses first, right? As the saying often mis-attributed to Chuck Jones goes, "All of you here have one hundred thousand bad drawings in you. The sooner you get rid of them, the better it will be for everyone."

Draug


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I love the design and I'll give it my vote, xaz, but I wish it was on a different color...

The enemy's gate is down.
Writers are people too! (Albeit strange ones.)
Save Poe! Reckon Nevermore! Or he'll be head-locked forevermore!

xazothia


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Draug wrote:I love the design and I'll give it my vote, xaz, but I wish it was on a different color...


Aww, no love for cranberry? Any particular reason?

I don't normally like "red" but I really do like woot's cranberry shirt color. I tried this on kelly green and royal blue as well (there's some images in the pre-derby thread), but cranberry was the crowd favorite.

gesangbaer


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Off topic comment, also posted in original submission of this design, ...

This shirt supplied me with some nostalgia. Reminded me of a character from a nintendo power comic MANY years ago, named Roam. He was a knight trapped in the world of darkness and stuck in the form of a hawk ... or an eagle.

Anyway, great shirt! Thanks for the memory!



gesangbaer


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And for the real link

Roam.

gesangbaer


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Apparently I've got no clue on how to submit links.

http://www.flyingomelette.com/oddities/sab/roam.jpg

mikan36


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gesangbaer wrote:Apparently I've got no clue on how to submit links.

http://www.flyingomelette.com/oddities/sab/roam.jpg


Hey! That looks like a Tezuka Osamu-influenced manga style~. It reminds me of a particular character from Cyborg 009. I know it's not, but the style is nearly exact. Pretty cool-

Interesting because I was thinking this shirt reminded me of GATCHAMANNNN! lol I know it's different, but the bird head just reminded me of it. Ahh, the good old days...

/On topic: (sorry for going off topic!) I usually don't like people on shirts but this is pretty cool~. I like the concept as well! :]

Draug


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xazothia wrote:Aww, no love for cranberry? Any particular reason?

I don't normally like "red" but I really do like woot's cranberry shirt color. I tried this on kelly green and royal blue as well (there's some images in the pre-derby thread), but cranberry was the crowd favorite.


It's not the cranberry. I just wish there wasn't so much of the same color on the actual design. But that's just me. I'm always like that.

The enemy's gate is down.
Writers are people too! (Albeit strange ones.)
Save Poe! Reckon Nevermore! Or he'll be head-locked forevermore!

Ikonos71


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I like the cranberry, and I like the girl's pose a lot. The only thing I don't like are the feet/talons.

xazothia


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Ikonos71 wrote:I like the cranberry, and I like the girl's pose a lot. The only thing I don't like are the feet/talons.


Thanks. I was trying to decide if they should be normal people feet, or since I made them more birdlike, if they should be colored differently from the skin... I kind of went halfway on that. :P

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