Derby #252: Three's a Crowd
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Bad Timing

Bad Timing
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inspektordogge


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That damn fairy is always interrupting things at the worst possible times...

6 colors on grass

inspektordogge


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I'd really appreciate some constructive criticism on this - I think I'm starting to get better at illustrating, but what can I improve on?

thechivaler


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inspektordogge wrote:I'd really appreciate some constructive criticism on this - I think I'm starting to get better at illustrating, but what can I improve on?


My wife (an illustrator and a Zelda fan) says you could work on your story telling. Navi is always shouting "HEY" so you could add that in, making it clear that Navi is interrupting them. It's also a little unclear what Zelda is thinking. Is she blushing because Navi just showed up, or because Link presented her with flowers?

inspektordogge


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thechivaler wrote:My wife (an illustrator and a Zelda fan) says you could work on your story telling. Navi is always shouting "HEY" so you could add that in, making it clear that Navi is interrupting them. It's also a little unclear what Zelda is thinking. Is she blushing because Navi just showed up, or because Link presented her with flowers?


Thanks for the help! I do think I should work on my ability to illustrate a scene using only one frame... That's definitely one of my weak points. My intentions for Zelda's expression were actually just about what you said, not one or the other in specific. She's both flattered by and sorry for Link, who can't seem to escape Navi's constant advice I hope that came across, more or less!
I also considered writing out "HEY!" But I decided to just use exclamation lines because I felt one word would be out of place when the rest is graphic.

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