Derby #84: The Sea
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Nautical Burst

Nautical Burst
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lemonlover


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Cool design! I want this shirt!

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JadenKale


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I'm torn.
I want to like your linework. As much as I hate rikkiB's work (if you are aware of who she is), I like the way this came out on top.

You killed it for me on the bottom though. You could have easily taken the concept down to the whale and added swirls and such within, to make it flow. As it is now, he looks too cartoony compared to the intricate work on top.

BootsBoots


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JadenKale wrote:I'm torn.
I want to like your linework. As much as I hate rikkiB's work (if you are aware of who she is), I like the way this came out on top.

You killed it for me on the bottom though. You could have easily taken the concept down to the whale and added swirls and such within, to make it flow. As it is now, he looks too cartoony compared to the intricate work on top.


Agreed, but I really like the top half. It's absolutely terrific.


tnt138


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JadenKale wrote:I'm torn.
I want to like your linework. As much as I hate rikkiB's work (if you are aware of who she is), I like the way this came out on top.

You killed it for me on the bottom though. You could have easily taken the concept down to the whale and added swirls and such within, to make it flow. As it is now, he looks too cartoony compared to the intricate work on top.


I have to agree. I was excited about the linework, but you lost me with the whale. Great design besides that.

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dhy211


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tnt138 wrote:I have to agree. I was excited about the linework, but you lost me with the whale. Great design besides that.


Agreed fourfold. I think you didn't even have to make the whale with lines and spirals. Just not so cartoony. It would've been cool with a 'realistic' looking whale shooting those lines and spirals out.

nihlnyc


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Thanks for the comments everyone! Yes, in retrospect...I agree that the whale could have been done using a more realistic or artistic style...I actually tried to make it a little cartoony since cute creatures seem to have quite the appeal on this site...next time I'll stick to my guns and go with the line work over the cartoons :P

MiKEYxCORE


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nihlnyc wrote:Thanks for the comments everyone! Yes, in retrospect...I agree that the whale could have been done using a more realistic or artistic style...I actually tried to make it a little cartoony since cute creatures seem to have quite the appeal on this site...next time I'll stick to my guns and go with the line work over the cartoons :P


I get where you're coming from. With cliche cute fogging all the time, it really does seem like copying that style is the only way to get any recognition on this site. But really, that linework you've got going on is infinitely better than the cute stuff we see all the time, and I would love this shirt if not for the whale. The composition is fantastic, and as previously mentioned, the intricate lineart is absolutely amazing.

:< Better luck next times, perhaps? I'll be keeping my eye out for you from now on.

JadenKale


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nihlnyc wrote:Thanks for the comments everyone! Yes, in retrospect...I agree that the whale could have been done using a more realistic or artistic style...I actually tried to make it a little cartoony since cute creatures seem to have quite the appeal on this site...next time I'll stick to my guns and go with the line work over the cartoons :P


ALWAYS go for strong rather than what's popular. Keep cohesiveness first before trading it in to snag a few of those "oh how cute" votes. I think those of us that love unique style will be watching you more closely should you be true to yourself and your design and not try to cater to the masses.

Might I suggest (read: urge) that, if you have the time before noon CST on Wednesday, could you rework the design with a more cohesive whale? (and I'd lose the water line. you don't need it) Focus on just the whale and the spout, and I think you could have a really stunning design.

lucky1988


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Love this as is!

theinfinityloop


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I agree with the others. I'm in awe of the top part!


czs


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Like as already been said...
Would of loved the shirt if whale looked more realistic, like a blue whale. The cartoon whale looks so out of place next to the gorgeous linework. The linework by itself would make an awesome shirt (though wouldn't be eligible for this "sea" derby).

Looking forward to seeing more of your submissions, as maybe it'll help get woot away from the typical cartoon stuff.

jrotnbrg24


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This is a great shirt I want one too, how can i make that possible?

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