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In The Odd Light Of Frankenstein's Lab

In The Odd Light Of Frankenstein's Lab
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odysseyroc


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Sometimes Madness is also delicious.





bethlehemstarr


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Another wonderful design from you!

paigeg


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Is that, like, a SARDINE or something he tried first? Ewwww - that IS madness! Lol!

odysseyroc


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paigeg wrote:Is that, like, a SARDINE or something he tried first? Ewwww - that IS madness! Lol!


Yes! A sardine, a chicken leg, a sausage and a carrot.





odysseyroc


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bethlehemstarr wrote:Another wonderful design from you!


Thanks! I'm glad you like it.





odysseyroc


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tjost


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I like the concept on this but there's a couple things to point out. First it took me a while to identify the peanut butter and chocolate, then to see the combos that didn't work in the background.

Second is there a reason he's proportioned like a monkey, I can see making him of small stature but I don't get the really short legs and really long arms.

Third, and this is more a style point, why is the tank on the right have shadow banding on the reflective metal parts when the one on the left doesn't, they both look like the same structure to me and I can't see anything that would block light in that pattern around the tank?

I think if you make the chocolate peanut butter a littler larger (as well as the stuff on the back table) fix his proportions (or just shorten his arms, and fix the lighting on the tanks you'll have a really strong piece. Good job though so far

tjost


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To add to my previous comment, the more I look at it I think you may have too much going on in the background too, maybe loose the tanks altogether, recenter main character and enlage the whole image so details aren't lost.

odysseyroc


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tjost wrote:I like the concept on this but there's a couple things to point out. First it took me a while to identify the peanut butter and chocolate, then to see the combos that didn't work in the background.


First, thanks for taking the time to crit this. I just wrapped up an 80 hour work week and wanted to squeeze a design in before my next week of crazy deadlines starts. Hopefully I'll be able to find time to make some adjustments.

I really wanted the gag to be there without hitting you over the head with it. In the end I do think the joke could stand to be more apparent

Second is there a reason he's proportioned like a monkey, I can see making him of small stature but I don't get the really short legs and really long arms.


Just a stylistic choice. I enjoy oddly proportioned cartoons.

Third, and this is more a style point, why is the tank on the right have shadow banding on the reflective metal parts when the one on the left doesn't, they both look like the same structure to me and I can't see anything that would block light in that pattern around the tank?


Deadline fatigue. I just totally spaced out on that. I make the highlights in big blocks and go back in with the local color and add the core shadows. I just neglected to add those.

I think if you make the chocolate peanut butter a littler larger (as well as the stuff on the back table) fix his proportions (or just shorten his arms, and fix the lighting on the tanks you'll have a really strong piece. Good job though so far

To add to my previous comment, the more I look at it I think you may have too much going on in the background too, maybe loose the tanks altogether, recenter main character and enlage the whole image so details aren't lost.


I'll try to do another with less bg elements and a bigger figure and see how that plays.





tjost


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odysseyroc wrote:I'll try to do another with less bg elements and a bigger figure and see how that plays.


No prob you do great work and I've watched your little how to videos. It's always neat to see how other artists work. Sorry about the workload I can sympathize, I can't remember a week that I havn't stayed up till 3 working on projects multiple nights. The plus side is that I'm making money but sleep is nice too

odysseyroc


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tjost wrote:No prob you do great work and I've watched your little how to videos. It's always neat to see how other artists work. Sorry about the workload I can sympathize, I can't remember a week that I havn't stayed up till 3 working on projects multiple nights. The plus side is that I'm making money but sleep is nice too


The curse of freelance work. It started on saturday when I got a call asking if I could take on 11 "easy" pages of a book called Blackest Night. They turned out to be the toughest pages I've colored in a couple of years. That backed my up on my other deadlline, which meant I had to do a weeks worth of work in 2 days. As soon as I finished that, I got a call asking if I could help out with 6 pages of Batman and Robin. Halfway through doing those I got a call asking if I could help with an 8 page online comic for a new Square Enix game. Of course I still have an issue of the WWII comic that I color monthly and I have no idea what the deadline is for that, so I'm sure they'll want it on tuesday. My head is spinning.





tjost


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odysseyroc wrote:The curse of freelance work. It started on saturday when I got a call asking if I could take on 11 "easy" pages of a book called Blackest Night. They turned out to be the toughest pages I've colored in a couple of years. That backed my up on my other deadlline, which meant I had to do a weeks worth of work in 2 days. As soon as I finished that, I got a call asking if I could help out with 6 pages of Batman and Robin. Halfway through doing those I got a call asking if I could help with an 8 page online comic for a new Square Enix game. Of course I still have an issue of the WWII comic that I color monthly and I have no idea what the deadline is for that, so I'm sure they'll want it on tuesday. My head is spinning.


You win ;)

odysseyroc


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tjost wrote:You win ;)


It sure doesn't feel like winning.





MadamAtom


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Oh heck yeah.

Loved it before I saw what he was making. Now I love it even more.

anjulka


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Well, if you happen to decide to play more with this instead of sleeping, pooping or eating, can you get rid of the skull as well please? I was so focused on the skull that someone else had to point out the peanut butter experiments.

anjulka


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Oh and pollenator77 wanted me to point out that he's not wearing his safety glasses. It's a very powerful combination, you know. He should be wearing the proper protection :-)

indihar


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OK...saw the other version, before seeing this one.

Oh snap...I love the "cyclinders" on this one enough, that they are a "deal-breaker" for me. But I can see where the other one would be preferred (the open space lets you focus more quickly on what he's holding up).

If you decide to "play" with placement on this one...I would suggest cutting out the table/skull/smaller cyclinder, moving the square part of the "computer bank" over to replace them. Then I still have the cyclinder...but you also get the space behind what he's holding up "freed up" so you can see what it is. (I also like the other table, that shows previous failed "experiments")

walmazan


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Oh man! This is unique and awesome! well done my friend

gmv

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