Derby #274: Monsters, Robots, and Aliens!
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Imaginary Fiend

Imaginary Fiend
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orabbit


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In his nest on Sesame Street, Big Bird waits dreaming. No one's going to believe that this imaginary friend is real. No wonder Romney wants to cut his funding.

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As usual, I've done some tweaks. Because of the pressure of finishing in a timely fashion every week, I always catch stuff after the fact. Here is the print-ready version:

Merseine


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*love* this! Snuffy-thulu!! I can't say "want!!!" enough.

deborah11565


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orabbit


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Thanks, Merseine and Deborah. Can anyone give me feedback as to what could be improved? I'm playing on the idea that Cthulhu comes to people in dreams, and that Big Bird has an "imaginary" friend. Is it clear that Big Bird is dreaming, or does he look dead? I'm not sure exactly how better to visually suggest dreaming. I could flesh out the rest of Big Bird, but I tried to keep it vague enough to avoid copyright issues. Thanks for any suggestions!

-Struggling Artist

deborah11565


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orabbit wrote:Thanks, Merseine and Deborah. Can anyone give me feedback as to what could be improved? I'm playing on the idea that Cthulhu comes to people in dreams, and that Big Bird has an "imaginary" friend. Is it clear that Big Bird is dreaming, or does he look dead? I'm not sure exactly how better to visually suggest dreaming. I could flesh out the rest of Big Bird, but I tried to keep it vague enough to avoid copyright issues. Thanks for any suggestions!

-Struggling Artist


I only came up with Z's...... but no text







flattopfrank


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orabbit wrote:Thanks, Merseine and Deborah. Can anyone give me feedback as to what could be improved? I'm playing on the idea that Cthulhu comes to people in dreams, and that Big Bird has an "imaginary" friend. Is it clear that Big Bird is dreaming, or does he look dead? I'm not sure exactly how better to visually suggest dreaming. I could flesh out the rest of Big Bird, but I tried to keep it vague enough to avoid copyright issues. Thanks for any suggestions!

-Struggling Artist


Let me see if i can explain this where you can understand it. Do you remember back on the old TV shows when someone or something would fade out into a dream sequence and the image would have that blurry wavey kinda thing going on. Maybe if you could fade out and do the wave thing to the bottom part of Snuffthulu it might help. That's the only thing I can come up with besides puttin some "ZZZ's" by Big Birds head and that will not work for this derby... GMV

Spiritgreen


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Very nice. :^)

orabbit


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Spiritgreen wrote:Very nice. :^)


I hope it's not too close to your Cookie Monster Cthulhu. I'm definitely aware of that one.

j5


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orabbit wrote:Can anyone give me feedback as to what could be improved?

Lose the brick wall bit. It's distracting and doesn't really add anything to the design. Here's a picture of BB sleeping for ref:
Typically, dreaming is illustrated with thought bubbles. You don't have to frame cthuluphagus in clouds, but maybe just a couple coming out of BB's head.

eta: BB is a minor character in this illo, maybe diminish his prominence to just a silhouette? Cthuluphagus was instantly recognizable from the thumb, so there's that.

move along

orabbit


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j5 wrote:blah blah buncha stuff


Thanks Johnny 5! That helps a lot. I'll rework it and resubmit elsewhere. I've almost got the hang of this game!

VenusAD


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j5 wrote:What he said


Totally agree. Also, BB needs to convey more adorableness and innocence. That pic he referenced of Big Bird sleeping is excellent. Curl the figure down a bit more. Maybe add the blanket and teddy bear. Also, I don't know if it'd be too many colors, but BB's eyelids are pink. right now, much as I love it, he seems pretty stiff and almost kinda sad.

orabbit


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VenusAD wrote:Totally agree. Also, BB needs to convey more adorableness and innocence. That pic he referenced of Big Bird sleeping is excellent. Curl the figure down a bit more. Maybe add the blanket and teddy bear. Also, I don't know if it'd be too many colors, but BB's eyelids are pink. right now, much as I love it, he seems pretty stiff and almost kinda sad.


Thanks for the feedback. Did you see the new version? Does this address your comments?

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